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Ansel Adams Project

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Option 1

 

In Ansel Adams' photograph, Moonrise, Hernandez, New Mexico, he captures the beauty and essence of nature coexisting with a human civilization. He does this by masterfully framing the moon as the focal point of the picture while showing so much else in the foreground and background. By framing and taking this picture, Adams captures the essence and beauty of nature and its ability to evoke emotions and a powerful message. He makes the moon the focal point and the secondary points are the mountains, the field, and the town. By using all of these things, Adams creates a picture that shows hope and despair. 

 

The first observation is that there is a graveyard right at the front of the town. Adams places it at the forefront in order to show that death that could have decimate the town. Since the town is in a desert region, it can be suggested that there could be a water crisis because people don't have water to drink; this could be one of the causes of death. Adams makes it seem as though the whole town has been devastated by loss and death by capturing the desolation and sadness that pervades throughout much of the picture. This shows the origin of much of the despair that the photographer has captured in the picture. 

 

Also at the forefront of the picture is a small town that has many aspects worth exploration. The first thing that caught my attention was how small it is and how few buildings it contains. All of the buildings are small adobe shacks, but the largest building in the town is the church. This suggests that religion is very important to the inhabitants of the town. It is also very interesting that the church is on the left side of the photograph as opposed to being in the middle. Like many other towns in the American Southwest, one would guess that the church would be in the middle of the town. By making the church off center, Adams creates this illusion that religion and faith in God has been pushed to the side so that the town can cope with and recover from the sadness and despair that is implied. Adams makes it seem as though the town has just become complacent and just accepted that the happy times are over. This is suggested by the stagnant and old look of the town; it looks very unchanging and timeless, almost as if time has stood still.

 

Then the photograph shows the barren land between the mountains and the town. The amount of land is very vast and is extremely lifeless. It also shows that there is a great distance between the town and the mountains. Behind the field lies the snow covered mountains. In many Southwestern towns, there is a shortage of water, and the water that the town receives flows from the mountains down to the town. This suggests that the mountains represent hope because the water that they provide has the power to bring life back to the town. Because there is a large and lifeless field there, it can be implied that the water will have to go through the field first. This shows that hope is far off but not unreachable. The field contains a scarce amount of plants, and the plants that are there look like they will die soon. Thus, the mountains will provide life to the lifeless and resurrect the town and areas surrounding it.

 

Adams frames the picture to focus on the moon to show that night is coming over the town and the surrounding areas. Also, he places the moon in the middle of the painting to create a horizon line that separates darkness from the light. By doing this, Adams adds to the mood of despair because darkness is coming over, but the light that is still visible represents the hope portrayed that is helped by the snow covered mountains. The water flows from the mountains after the sun melts it, which implies that the light helps add to the hope provided by the water. The darkness represents despair and grief, but the contrast with the light shows that hope and happiness will return.

 

In this photograph, Adams shows the constant pull between light and dark or joy and despair. Because night is falling, there is a small sense of despair, but the light that is still shown represents the hope that is still to come. The snow-covered mountains show the new life that the water from the snow will bring to the surrounding areas and to the town. When he focuses on the moon, Adams draws attention to the darkness and the light. By putting many details into to the secondary focus, he shows the contrast between despair and hope. This picture is reminiscent of a scripture that says, "...weeping may endure for a night, but joy cometh in the morning.", because Adams incorporates the symbolism of night and day to represent joy and despair. 

 

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Comments (6)

Joe Essid said

at 8:56 pm on Sep 23, 2009

Antoine,

Here are some notes about claims:

--"The darkness represents despair and grief." Or it might represent the "cool of the evening" after a long hot day. I'd find details that provide support of this negative view of the nightfall.

--"The mountains are the last hope that could save the town from the despair." This too has some issues. Could there be several implications from each of these two details? You have one observation for each: darkness is falling and snow-capped mountains rise in the distance. They could each imply several things, and Adams' other details (he chose what to shoot) may help support one implication more than another.

--The description of the vast and arid landscape works better, though here too I see you using it to bolster a claim about the mountains that I'm not quite ready to accept. Yet I see some promising ideas here. The arid land needs water if people are to live there. And where might that water come from in the West?

--The description of the town is stronger still! Placing the church off center was a detail I did not notice. I'd wager that in most of these small desert towns, the church, like churches in European villages, would have been at the center. Thus moving it was Adams' act, not that of the people who made the town.

--I knew you'd get to the graveyard! How does it help with the implications I find shaky about the fall of night and the distant mountains?

Here are a few sentence-level ideas to fix or just consider:

--"By framing and taking, this picture, " Now where does that introduction to your sentence end? It seems that the comma after "taking" stops the reader. Now remove it and see how the introduction to the sentence looks and sounds.

Joe Essid said

at 6:57 pm on Sep 24, 2009

Even though I now clearly see that you are choosing option 2, see about qualifying the claims I note. In fact, they become more important to qualify in a paper with a clear thesis.

In arguing for your point, consider which observations and details from the photo will support, and which complicate, your governing claim.

As you read through, too, consider repetition that is not needed, such as "focus on the moon. Because the main focus is on the moon. . . ." I would recommend that you instead replace the second "on the moon" with "Because of this focus. . . ." Get your group to read through and look for other areas that may need this sort of careful weighing of the most effective words for a given sentence.

Jordan Smith said

at 4:04 pm on Sep 29, 2009

1. The point of departure: framing of picture truly captures what is in nature.
2. Sentence: "By framing and taking, this picture, Adams captures what is truly in nature by taking pictures of the scenes that evoke emotions from the photograph."
3. How or Why: the framing and taking of the picture.
4. The thesis is not very clear, and it is somewhat confusing.
5. Confusing. But, I do like what you are talking about in the wiki. I would just change the thesis to make it less confusing.

ian said

at 8:56 pm on Sep 29, 2009

I agree with all that was said above but here is a little more input.

-- In the sentence "By framing and taking, this picture, Adams captures what is truly in nature by taking pictures of the scenes that evoke emotions from the photograph." I would take out "from the photograph" or change it or something. It seems redundant and pointless, unless I am reading it wrong.
-- Minor thing: I would change that's to that/this is
-- Personally I assumed the sentences "Many say that "A black and white photo, framed and carefully shot by a master photographer, does not capture what is really in nature", but that's not true. A black and white photograph can exemplify the character and meaning of a picture by showcasing the beauty of nature." were collectively the compound thesis statement. I found it a little unsatisfying to be honest. You say that a photograph can exemplify the character and meaning of a picture by showcasing the beauty of nature but fail to mention why or how. I found myself asking myself the "so what" question so if I were you I would say what about its character showcases the beauty of nature.

I hope this helps!

ian said

at 8:58 pm on Sep 29, 2009

Oh and you are doing Option 2, not Option 1. Might want to fix that at the top.

ian said

at 3:52 pm on Oct 1, 2009

So before I did not do the official following the bullets before so here we go..

1-- Point of departure---clear--- The framing of the picture is what captures what is in nature
2--to be verbs-- you use "is" 26 times so you might want to do a little modifying there. "Was" is used only once, "were" zero times, and "are" four times. I would only focus on changing the "is"s
3--Clear focus: Check
4--I would work on the conclusion a bit more

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